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Prolix · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:13 pm

New member here. Ive been watching this forum for a while but was too lazy to post anything. Heres a quick sketch i did earlier today, nothing big. Crit on every detail (mainly anatomy) u can find wrong. Ok nuff said here:

[edit]the damn URL sorry[/edit]
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Nick Hansen of Faux Reality Graphic Designs

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Loki · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:17 pm

dude - your pic doesn't show up!

Prolix · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:39 pm

yeah sorry bout that, crosswinds is wierd, i guess i needed the "www." in front. I just want some comments, thanks in advanced.

MaLoRuM · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:43 pm

Right away what i noticed is that, its a great picture but shes tipped to the left? shes not standing straight up.... kinda awkward... normally i wouldnt have any problem with it, its kind of interestin to draw your subject slightly tilted, if it looks intentional. but since shes so slightly tilted it looks more like a mistake... just grab that bad girl in a crop and stand her butt straigt up and it wont bother me no more hehehe. just a small gripe... otherwise i like the sketch, you should definetly color it!

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MaLoRuM · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:49 pm

Sorry i just noticed something else... she has no Knee caps...

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The Correct Procedure in The Art of the B*tch Slap: *Extend arm* *reel back* *twist torso* *stare opponent in eye* *twist back and release* :) *follow up with something cool to say*

Prolix · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:51 pm

hehe, yeah i guess i scanned it crooked, and i rushes fast on the legs (my class was almost over). Thanks for the comments though. keep em coming :P

Matt Elder · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:52 pm

Welcome to the forum. The sketch looks pretty good for the most part. See previous post about the tilting aspect. Also with tilting, think of what the 'chopsticks' are doing in her hair. At the moment she is leaning but this sorta of make it look funny as they are a bit to vertical to support the leaning idea.

Try to clean up the feet as the black/grey area isn't clear and difficult to make out. Pay particular attention to the feet detail as at the moment, they look at little bit funny. I agree, colour it but watch the lighting/shadow cast on the right breast in particular. I think at the moment it is too much in shadow and doesn't look 100% right.

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Awetopsy · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 1:53 pm

man... lloking good. the only things I can see that I would want to point out are: the area from the bottom of the lips to the shoulders. give her a bit more of a chin.(slight) thin her neck some and bring her shoulders up. (not so slanted down... just looks akward like that.) Also when you bring the shoulders up make sure her elbows are relatively the same height as the waist. then lengthen the forarms a bit to the top of the thigh. other than that? great work.

like this (http://noelsart.tripod.com/tutimag/quick_re.gif) go check it out
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Prolix · Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2000 2:33 pm

Thanks for the comments, ill try to post more pics to get more help. You will see more of me soon.

-Nick Hansen