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Samson & Friends
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 Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2001 5:42 am |
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Any crits? I'm not sure if I should colour this in Photoshop or not. |
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LeChuck
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| Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2001 6:30 am |
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Give it some emotion. Make the fish look adorable with big "presious moments" eyes so you almost feel bad when it gets its head cut off.
The fish has an exprestion like "I dont care whats going on. I hope I die soon"
[ October 02, 2001: Message edited by: LeChuck ] |
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Matt Elder
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| Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2001 8:05 pm |
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You've got some nice work happenin' here. I guess my comments are more from a sequential art / storytelling point of view as that will be really important to get your ideas/message across.
In the 2nd row, I think you are missing a panel. You have the fish looking at the bait, a guy, then the fish in the guys hand. You really need a panel showing the fish being caught, a fishing rod bending, the fish being taken from the hook etc. It just seems to happen a little too quick without any sort of explanation.
Then the second last panel where the fish is shown about to be cut, it seems very static - like the knife has just been held there so you can draw a fish about to be cut. put some speed lines in or draw it from a different angle or something.
Otherwise it is good as sequential art can be a difficult thing. |
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