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Totally · Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2001 9:15 pm

All right instead of bringing back an ancient thread I've decided to create a new one for the revised version of the image.

Please comment/suggest/critique away.

I've been changing/adjusting portions of the painting off and on for the past few weeks... adjusting the eyes, modifying the hair, adding more contrast to the skin, etc etc etc....
http://www.perilith.com/~totally/randicompfull3.jpg is the full, high resolution version.
http://www.sijun.com/dhabih/ubb/Forum5/HTML/001740.html is the old post, including the old image.
http://www.perilith.com/~totally/randiref.jpg is the reference image.

Any comments/critiques are welcomed.

[Edit] The image has been updated. The old version can be found here: http://www.perilith.com/~totally/randicomplow3.jpg [/Edit]

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[This message has been edited by Totally (edited April 12, 2001).]

shardik · Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2001 9:25 pm

that is reaaaaally good man... pictures like that are tough... i made one for my girlfriend and i never liked it cus i wanted it to look perfect but urs looks really good..

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Totally · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 6:20 am

heh yea a girlfriend can be a tough subject just cause you really know the person and really want it to turn out right...

So the best way to approach it is to probly not think about that alltogether and just approach it like any other portrait.

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trudel · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 6:26 am

Very well done!

Enayla · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 6:53 am

I really like it! Her skin tones are very nice, and her eyes seem to have a lot of soul behind them (not flat and dead like the eyes of very many pictures)

That said, I think you could've worked a little bit more on her stray locks of hair. They look a bit ragged and uneven in places - I don't know quite how to describe it. Even so - this is a very pretty picture!

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Totally · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 12:17 pm

Enayla: oi! more about those stray strands of hair!

...I will be certain to make more adjustments to them when I have a free moment (this afternoon or tonight)

All who responded to the original post: what do you think about the changes? Do you feel that I missed anything commented on, or do you have any new comments?

Keep the critiques comin!

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Totally · Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2001 5:09 pm

ok I made a few changes to the hair on this.. uh... finished piece.. you likey? you no likey? you think I need do somethin more? somethin less? oi oi?

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Totally · Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2001 2:48 pm

comments? crits? anybody?

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Frost · Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2001 4:28 pm

The face is skewed... the head would be tilted, but then form of the head and facial features are, well, skewed. It a nice rendering though.

Totally · Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2001 8:18 pm

hrmn.. by scewed I'm thinkin you're talkin about the angles... yea.. some might be a bit off... and the mouth certainly "droops" too much on the right side (her left, our right)

basic head structure & angles:

perhaps the center vertical line should be tilted a little more clockwise... woopee...

The underdrawing was a very quick gesture sketch (about 3 minutes) that I never had the intention of using for anything else... til I decided to paint this... Would have been better with the angles if I had done a more precise underdrawings prolly.

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