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raybender
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 25, 2008 10:28 pm     Reply with quote
hey Guys,

some of you may have seen this in the speedpainting thread.. i would like to take this one a little bit further, but would like to hear some comments on it first... what do you think or what should i improve in concept stage before going to detail it ?
as you can see some parts are not even touched (people) this is because im still not sure where to go with it. i never did a detailed painting before (started some, never finished) so im without a clue how to continue...


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PostPosted: Tue Sep 02, 2008 11:43 pm     Reply with quote
hmm.. 94 views and no one has a little help ? i mean.. is it that bad ? Sad
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 03, 2008 1:23 am     Reply with quote
It might be that good. Wink

Hmm, I think it'd look better with a wider "lens", so the characters would be much bigger. Really depends what you're going for though.
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 03, 2008 2:26 pm     Reply with quote
I think people are waiting for you to post more updates, if your not getting a lot of crits keep posting and somebody will either rip you apart or tell you that your doing really good. Just keep up the good work =D
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 05, 2008 5:52 pm     Reply with quote
I like it, the overall mood and colours are very good.

If I have to make suggestions, I'd say the perspective is rather wonky at the moment. I see that you've used a wide angle lens for the view, yet parts of the floor and the stairs don't seem to follow that - especially for the railing of the stairs. The rails where the viewer looking over would be more leveled and not slanted to such an angle too. I'd say for pieces like this, you should lay down a proper grid and follow it closely, as it will save you alot of second-guessing later on, a lesson i have only learned recently.

Also I'd probably move the flamthrower guy closer to the broken door facing the viewer, and perhaps looking up to the infestation on the right for better effect.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 2:43 pm     Reply with quote
it`s a nice start, really like it!
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 7:04 am     Reply with quote
i like the composition with the stairs going up into that white snow.
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 12:19 pm     Reply with quote
i changed the stairs and image frame a bit...



and i built the scene roughly in sketchup to get the perspective right.. Smile

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 15, 2008 10:48 am     Reply with quote
I think you have a great setting here and my advice would be to now pick your elements(make sure each element has it's own layer) and start touching up your details. You could start with that background wall, then do the stairs, then the ceiling, then the people, etc etc.. Just pick one element and run with it and then move onto the next. Remember there is only one way to eat an elephant... One bite at a time
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PostPosted: Mon Oct 20, 2008 7:18 pm     Reply with quote
It is a very interesting image, my feelings I get from it are that these guys are from another planet with an interest in a human race obsolete. I dunno, I'm giving you something to work with here.
Then again, if it's a nest, maybe it's a futuristic theme.

You can make some interesting technologies on the men in the middle and make it kind of interesting.

Also, is that a statue next to the stairs? You could give the scene an eerie feeling to it.. A sort of un-inviting feel.

Keep up the good work!
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 28, 2008 5:49 am     Reply with quote
I like how you've used temperature to help the composition, really helping the image flow. nothing much needs changing, just need to start polishing it up, particularly your focal areas. those figures are gunna be tough, make sure they look part of their environment, get those warms on cools on the figures and make sure they're interesting.

i really like it, hope it turns out well man.
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 08, 2009 3:20 pm     Reply with quote
didnt work on that one for a long time.. anyway.. heres the update.

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 23, 2009 11:39 am     Reply with quote
Listen I like all the aspects, in fact my favorite part is the lighting (especially the flashlight hitting the dust speckles) BUT I do not like the dude on the right, I feel like he is really out of place. I really just want to see the guy with the flashlight alone. I feel like if he was alone it would make the painting a lot more eerie
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