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Petri.J
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 27, 2012 3:14 am     Reply with quote
This is still in concept stage so if you have any suggestions on how to improve this, now is a good time to critique.
If I end up liking this, then I will make a matte painting out of this, meaning that it will have moving stuff in it.
I used central composition because I wanted the eye to focus on that building, but maybe I should have some more stuff flying around it?
I also left the sky kind of dark so that artificial light on the building will get more focus.
I think the picture might need some stuff on the background, but I would not want to add anything too dominating there so that focus would stay on the building. I tried some huge levitating spherical buildings, but they attracted too much attention.

I also had an idea of making the background even darker like the building would be build in some huge hall. I might add a version of that if it looks decent.

I'm not entirely happy with the result, I feel that it's missing something. As a thumbnail it looks good but it doesn't give me that Whow effect. I'm not sure if that is because it doesn't have details yet or if is because of something more fundamental. Any thoughts?

Cheers, Petri J

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samhell
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 28, 2012 1:18 am     Reply with quote
Hi!

I think I would like to see more action around the building. When i first saw the image, I could not tell that it was self assembling. The text was needed to drive that fact home.

Otherwise I really like this one, the framing, colours, gorgeous. Maybe some distant details on the horizon might be worth a thought?

Hope this helps. Smile
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wiredgear
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 28, 2012 10:31 am     Reply with quote
I would have to agree with samhell. I really didn't know it was self assembling until it was mentioned. I think some close foreground planks should do it maybe? with some motion blur? Colors are great and some distant structure would add more depth to the image.

Post up some more progress Wink
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 02, 2012 5:13 am     Reply with quote
I use the smudge brush on the outside.. Gives the impression of motion blur.. would this be any help?
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