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waylon
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 9:36 am     Reply with quote
Hi, everybody! I'm trying out a new style here - inspired quite a bit by some of Micke's drawings. It's not exactly the most dramatic pose ever, but hey. Crits, anyone?

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 9:51 am     Reply with quote
looks more like a man trying to make himself up as a woman. and with fake breasts.

the only thing that's wrong with it are the lips. they're way too strong/sized.

why are his/her eye balls the same tone as his/her skin?
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you're going to the right direction though.

i dig micke's work alot.


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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 10:00 am     Reply with quote
Some humans don't look perfect, faust, only some

There are people with big mouths, huge or tiny noses, fish-eyes or dambo ears...

I think it looks fine, as a drawing in general.
About the face itself, it's only a matter of choice...
If you decide you want her to look more "pretty" - u can listen to faust about fixing up her mouth

I kinda like it the way it is...
The mouth gives her somewhat of a serius/unhappy mood....



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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 10:11 am     Reply with quote
Hmmmmmmmmmm. You know, I THOUGHT she looked a bit macho, but I wasn't sure how to fix it. Thanks. I'll play with it some more later. And I'll lighten up the eyes, too.
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 1:10 pm     Reply with quote
she's wearing the highest push-up bra ever.
she either has a really short torso, or a really big head but im just picking at it, i couldn't do any better. good job

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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 1:25 pm     Reply with quote
Thanks for the input everyone. I'll probably have a new version up tomorrow. I really appreciate all the comments!
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 03, 2001 1:56 pm     Reply with quote
Hey Waylon. =)

Cool image. Her breast bulges should be a little lower I think. The nostrils define the nose improperly... shortening the chin a little will make her less Swarzennegger-ish. I like it though, simplistic/minimalistic.
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 04, 2001 12:22 am     Reply with quote
She's gonna lose some machismo when you slope up the chin line more steeply, so that it would connect to the hairline if you extended it. the length of the chin line is ok, though. Also, try to round the cheeks, that means, round the right cheek, and adjust the shadow on the left cheek so that it is more rounded. She looks kinda starving
You could also adjust the forehead a bit, make the head a bit smaller on its right side.
Also, try to move the lower nose bit a bit to the right, maybe tilt it a bit as well. The mouth IS pretty big and pretty dark.
A word on the left eye: i'd widen the shadow to include some of the space between eye and nose back. This makes the nose come out better, and the eye go a bit deeper.

(all instances of left and right are meant to be seen from the object's viewpoint)



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PostPosted: Thu Jan 04, 2001 5:59 am     Reply with quote
Ok, I fixed most of the things you guys pointed out. I had a hell of a time getting her shoulders/chest right, but there's no question that they're significantly better than the first version. I'm prepared to call it done, but if you guys find anything else major, I'll do one more revision. Thanks for all the help!



[EDIT: Oh, as you can probably tell, I had a bit of trouble getting the cloth right on her left arm... any advice?]

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 05, 2001 12:12 am     Reply with quote
Looks alot more feminine now, good work.

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PostPosted: Fri Jan 05, 2001 2:48 am     Reply with quote
eekk she looks like she could kick the shit through me

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PostPosted: Sat Jan 06, 2001 6:09 pm     Reply with quote
Yeah, second one is tons better, good work! It's amazing what a difference a little change can make...
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